Draft 3 - Storyline

We felt as though there was too much happening in the trailer and it felt more like a short film than a trailer so we have decided to change the storyline slightly in order to make it less narrative and more engaging.

3^rd draft of storyline

1)      George is on BMX, at many .locations doing tricks. During each trick a photo ‘snapshot’ is taken.

2)      Becca putting on lipstick, cuts to her shadows of her doing this, she sits down (still filming shadow). Then cuts to her rearranging pictures (the snapshots) on a table

3)      George sitting down to breakfast; phone on table and he gets a text; Picks it up as he gets a picture message ‘From unknown’  opens to reveal picture say ‘Keep friends close and enemies closer’

Transition: ‘Shot of trick’

4)      George putting on shoes in room at his computer desk; email pops up of message from ‘Unknown’ Picture message ‘Prepare yourself’

Transition: ‘Shot of trick’

5)      Picks up post – flicks through ‘read me’ reads note , drops the note and leaves his house

6)      Goes down drive and bikes down road and round corner (freaking out)

7)      Shot of bike wheel spinning zooms in on post it note with a kiss mark on it.